How to Write Outstanding TV Commercial Treatments

The Moon Unit
6 min readJan 21, 2020

For many Directors, the most challenging part of the TVC production process is pitching.

As if it weren’t already tough enough to be a freelance commercials Director, during the pitching process you have to sell your idea, your personality and sometimes what feels like your soul to the client.

And that’s all without any guarantee of winning.

It’s a dog-eat-dog world where it’s not always the most skilled Director who gets the job, but the one who manages to sell their vision the best — so knowing how to write a treatment that stands out from the crowd is integral to success.

Pitching can be an uncertain time for even the most battle-hardened creatives out there, but it’s one of the most rewarding and creatively inspiring parts of TVC production. We know how real the creative block can be, so thought we’d distil our knowledge from crafting thousands of winning treatments into a few simple tips to get you writing and give you the edge in your next creative pitch.

Be a visionary

You’re pitching to stand out from the competition. To win. The best way to do that?

Be yourself.

This point seems so obvious that it’s often paradoxically overlooked. Many Directors fall in to the trap of writing what they think the client wants to hear and it often ends up sounding as sterile as a quarterly finance report.

Don’t be afraid to be weird — embrace it. Talk and think as you would normally. After all, you’ve been chosen to pitch based on your creative portfolio, so to suppress your creativity when selling your vision is to actively work against your chances of winning.

However, that doesn’t mean to let yourself go completely. Make their idea your own, elevate it and embellish it with your personal touch, but be careful not to get totally carried away in the process — the trick is to hit the sweet spot of letting your personality come across within the bounds of what the client wants from the job.

Here are a few concrete tips on how to go about that:

- Try adding a personal anecdote to show how you connect with the script. It can be funny, heartfelt or even metaphorical. Showing that you can relate to the client’s idea is a powerful tool.

- Avoid using language that you wouldn’t in the conference call. If you feel the need to write about how ‘authentic’ or ‘organic’ the end product will look, the chances are that it will read the opposite.

- Use attention grabbing headers. Instead of ‘Casting’ try ‘Meet Dave’. Instead of ‘Tone’ try ‘How it Feels to be Hit Upside the Head with A Metric Shit Ton of Feel-Good’. Whatever, just have fun with it. The people you’re pitching to have to read these things daily, so mixing up the formula a little will increase the chances that they remember you.

Approach the conference call with open ears

The con call is a fantastic opportunity to figure out how to approach a job. By the time it happens you’ll have done some serious thinking about your ideas, and you’ll probably be eager to share them. Hold that impulse. Turn on your recorder and sit back and listen.

There’s a lot to be learned from the subtext of the con call. What key words are being repeated? What fears might the client have about the job? Who is the main decision maker, and what do they want? What ideas are the agency creatives set on, and what do they want you to add to? Write yourself questions like these before the call, because their answers will determine the delivery of your treatment.

Make sure to take time at the front end of the call to listen to the client and gauge how they will be choosing the winner. Don’t jump in and start talking over them about how great the final product will look — use that time consider the best questions to ask. Then near the end of the call you can discuss your vision with their desires in mind.

Finally, listen back to the recording. Maybe even twice. Even while listening attentively and taking notes there’s always priceless information that slips between the cracks, especially in the subtext.

Complement your writing visually

It might not necessarily be a writing tip, but having amazing visuals is part and parcel to delivering a winning treatment.

Every Director uses images differently when pitching. Some like literal visual expressions of their writing, whereas others prefer to evoke a particular mood or feeling. Some use many images in a montage style, some keep it minimalistic. Take the time to find a style that works — not only for you, but also for the type of job you’re pitching for.

Most treatment writing articles found online will focus on design and formatting when it comes to the visual section. Not this one. You can find how to do that yourself with a few quick searches (though it might take a little longer to learn). Instead, we’ll focus on the highly secretive art of image sourcing, and the do’s and don’ts of image usage.

Many Directors will have a library of images compiled for the sole purpose of creating treatments. These libraries are built over many years from sources of visual inspiration such as stills from TVCs or films, photographs, scans of print ads and magazines, and any number of other visual media. Because of the depth of doing great visual research (not to mention design), many Directors these days outsource their research work to professional ‘visual researchers’. Their job it is to find, compile and sometimes design images in a way that describes and amplifies the Directors ideas visually.

The truth is, there is no singular trick to image sourcing. It’s a skill that requires the brain of a librarian and the touch of an artist, and while it’s possible to learn, it requires time and patience such that it has become a vocation in itself. There are a few ground rules to keep in mind however:

- Don’t ever use stock photo websites. It’s uninspired, and it always shows.

- Try to use images from movies wherever you can. Clients love to see their ad envisioned with a cinematic quality in mind.

- Keep it relevant! Make sure your images complement the writing and stay related to the type of job or visual aesthetic you’re aiming for. Everything in the treatment will impact how the client sees your interpretation of their concept, so it’s important to use images that capture the essence of the idea.

- Don’t be afraid to make and edit images yourself. You can overlay, montage, color grade and even add hand-drawn elements if you see fit. It can show your creativity and the fact that you’ve thought about the project deeper than just showing what other films or TVCs the finished product could look like.

Finally, you can double check your finished treatment against this flowchart and the points in this article to determine that it has all the elements of a successful treatment:

If you’re still stuck or would like some further reading, check out our series of free ebooks. They cover writing and designing successful treatments, cultivating a winning mind set as an upcoming Director, how to pitch feature films and everything in between.

Or if you’re really pressed for time or completely out of inspiration, chat with us or shoot an email to hello@themoonunit.net. We’re active 24/7 and always up to discuss anything pitching related.

Originally published at https://themoonunit.com.

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